The graduation present
A young man who admired a sports car was going to graduate from college. Knowing his father could afford it, he waited for the graduation day. On the morning his father gave him a leather-bound Bible. The young man was angry and away home, never came back. After years, the young man was successful and had a wonderful family. He recalled his father and wanted to see him, but before he done it his father dead. When he came back to his father’s house he found the Bible. As he opened it, a car key dropped from the back of the Bible.
posted by Ariel's castle @ 7:17 PM
1 Comments:
‧I think she done the summary very clear and definite.
‧She summarized very clear but forgot to cite that the morning was on the graduation day.
‧The thesis of the original essay is clear in her summary, I think the thesis in the original essay is that the young man wanted to make it up to his father but everything was too late.
‧I was identified the same thesis.
‧I don’t think she miss any key points from her summary.
‧She didn’t include any of her own opinions in her summary.
‧She didn’t include any unimportant details in her summary.
‧I think the summary could be more emotional. Otherwise, it might not so attractive to people that want to read the original ones.
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